Afterwards

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The Truth Commission

Afterwards
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This is the Sand Box, for everyone to play in. Message me and I will post it here.

Lord Byron

"Manfred"

By thy cold breast and serpent smile,
By thy unfathom'd gulfs of guile,
By that most seeming virtuous eye,
By thy shut soul's hypocrisy;
By the perfection of thine art
Which pass'd for human thine own heart;
By thy delight in others' pain,
And by thy brotherhood of Cain,
I call upon thee! and compel
Thyself to be thy proper Hell!

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2. Who's side are you on?
3. How is this difference from any other revolution?
4. Are we free now?
5. Do you stand for equality for everyone?
   

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Production
Feb 28 publish video to the public
Feb 15 completed editing
Jan 29 begin filming
Jan 27 casting call

ScreenPlay
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Jan 12 completed Act 5, proffing, editing
Jan 11 completede Act 3 and Act 4
Jan 10 completed Act 1 and Act 2
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Afterwards Scene IX
"Feed Back"
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(Dave Jericho talks with Tomorrow 7 about the screenplay. This is the kind of feed back that I like. )

Tomorrow 7

just read your screenplay.

Dave Jericho

yeah what did you think?

Tomorrow 7

its interesting

also, if by any chance you need someone to portray a villain of most heinous and unspeakable quality in the filming of this screenplay, look me up

Dave Jericho

that roll is open

Avarice is his name

Tomorrow 7

cool

Dave Jericho

yeah and the screenplay is far from finished and i am going to direct it myself

Tomorrow 7

if i do this, i would like to have creative input into the development of my character... subject to your final approval, as the creator of the screenplay, which i will comply with completely

Dave Jericho

absolutely, i actually was hoping to have the actors develop their own characters. The only characters that I need to developed in the script are Justice and Jack and Charity, all the other characters develop on their own

Tomorrow 7

excellent

one of my ambitions in life has been to be a movie villain

Dave Jericho

this is good, Avarice is one hell of a villain
he thinks that it is ok to let babies and children die when he is buying a new pool for his 7th house

Tomorrow 7

alright, here's what i was thinking, as sort of a preliminary thing...

most of the characters in your screen play seem to be based on universal virtues/vices

Dave Jericho

yeah

Tomorrow 7

and his history seems to go from World War II (helping Hitler to power) to the present day

Dave Jericho

maybe more of the cold war era but yes continue

Tomorrow 7

so... in a way, it seems like he, and Justice, and Charity are timeless and more than human in a way... almost demigod-like

Dave Jericho

yeah that is well put sir
they are all part of the balance

Tomorrow 7

so I see them representing more universal things than just current political systems, like capitalism, socialism, etc

Dave Jericho

this is good

Tomorrow 7

even though most of the people who work for Avarice are likely to be capitalists

Dave Jericho

yes but he is bigger than that

Tomorrow 7

and Avarice rewards those who serve him (or are motivated only by greed) as opposed to the more utilitarian, populist nature of Justice or Charity

so in a way, your play is about the overthrow of one timeless figure (Avarice) to be replaced by Justice and Charity

Dave Jericho (

he has alot of power, all fuel by greed

yes, that is perfect, nicely said sir

Tomorrow 7

haha, nice to use my english degree for something

Dave Jericho

well i was hoping that it was that dynamic
and i love writing the scenes, they are so much fun to write

Tomorrow 7

yeah, i was referring mostly to my analyzing the hell out of everything

Dave Jericho

i love to hear feedback like that, thank you

Tomorrow 7

yeah, no prob

Dave Jericho

you can write Act 1 Scene 4 "Interview with Greedy Capitalist" if you like

Tomorrow 7

also, i think it's important to have a character like Avarice survive the end of the show, however beaten he might be... because a timeless character like that can never be destroyed... you can just get people to stop listening to him, which renders him powerless

Dave Jericho

i was hoping to set the stage as director for these situations to build themselves
I actually did have him survive

Tomorrow 7

capitalism was his great invention to be in control of the world system, and its collapse is a major setback, but i don't see him as one to give up.... he can still work on an individual level

Dave Jericho

he was captured and forced to watch all of the war trials, as he was to be tried last

Tomorrow 7

ah, yeah

Dave Jericho

depending on what the people want to do with him... it is up to the people democratic vote, and Charity to decide his fate

i have ended this play before his trial so he survives to the next play

Tomorrow 7

i feel that there's a problem in killing off a representation of a timeless idea, though

perhaps... but i think a better way to deal with something like that is to show him destitute, dressed in rags, and disregarded at the end, but still nursing plots to regain power

Dave Jericho

or to simply forgive because what is done is done, 2 wrongs dont make a right, kind of thing

Tomorrow 7

right

Dave Jericho

very good

Tomorrow 7

thanks

Dave Jericho

i look forward to working with you

Tomorrow 7

yeah, it should be productive

Dave Jericho

do you think this screen play has potential?

Tomorrow 7

i think it has potential... although there are also some suggestions i might make to improve it

Dave Jericho

great, put everything in writing
i am going to work another 50 hours on this thing, you know, make it perfect
and i always take suggestions

Tomorrow 7

alright, well acts 3 and 4 work out on paper, where you have all your sociology/philosophy papers, but i don't think you want to have the whole thing read when you actually tape it.... maybe have some discussion about what the most important parts are and include the essays as supplementary material when someone gets a copy of the finished show

it would be really hard to maintain an audience's attention throughout a reading of all that text

Dave Jericho

yeah it needs a lot of work but that is basically what is going to be said topics to be covered

Tomorrow 7

and... be careful in using other sources, such as Wikipedia or anything else.... copyright laws, etc

Dave Jericho

i am going to write out more and fix theses scenes, but i am also interested in developing the characters and then working on making scenes that develop theses points it might be documentary style to keep cost production down you know, having a law professor talk about discrimination and so on

Tomorrow 7

also, there's a lot of information in this... before you start filming, i suggest you get a few friends together and do a read-through, and have a copy in hand, and pay attention to how this thing flows when its actually being read out, and edit the script accordingly

that way you can have an idea of how your work plays out instead of going blindly into filming

Dave Jericho

yup, that is always good
i am going to need someone that has a really good voice for jack,
although they never have to be on screen

some scenes i am planning on filming without actors at all, just pictures and other stuff

there is going to be music too

Tomorrow 7

and finally, think about the timeline... you have the aftermath of the great war, then the reasons why it was started, then the events itself...

i'm not sure if that's the most logical way to lay it out

Dave Jericho

i hear some opera somewhere in the play

Tomorrow 7

hmm, cool

Dave Jericho

yeah

Tomorrow 7

i did like the storyline, though... seems like you put a lot of thought into it, and it makes all the difference between a dry, educational film and something that's fun to follow and educational at the same time

Dave Jericho

yeah, you think so?
i have such a hard time making things up, but battleships and redwings came so naturally to me
oh and the artillery,
i just love in visioning this stuff

Tomorrow 7

yeah, well its almost science fiction-like in a lot of ways

Dave Jericho

it is so much fun yeah, but with a hidden (or not so hidden) message so it really is a strong story then
by the way, did you find jack useful and how long did it take you to read it

Tomorrow 7

yeah, it seems like a lot of elements of it haven't been fleshed out yet, but it does have potential, and it makes sense

well, i did it a bit at a time over a while, but probably an hour and a half, though i skimmed over acts 3 and 4

umm... i think a narrator is useful... i didn't feel like Jack had enough of a purpose as a character in his own right to set him apart from just a generic narrator

Dave Jericho

I want to develop him much more, he is not real, he is supposed to be a bot

Tomorrow 7

yeah

true

Dave Jericho

did you like the interview style

Tomorrow 7

yeah, i think it works out, but to really know these things, you'd have to read them out loud

Dave Jericho

on the to do list is buy a mic, and start recording

Tomorrow 7

i suggest preparing two versions... one with the interview, one that's just a monologue, read them both out loud (or have them both read to you, ideally) and see which sounds better to you

Dave Jericho

but I want someone else to theatrically read it,
so that means that i need to write it better
yeah that is a really good suggestion

Tomorrow 7

yeah, ive had some experience writing for the theatre, and one of the most valuable things in developing a piece is a read through... ideally, you shouldn't participate in the reading, but sit there with a copy of the script and a pen, making notes while people read it to you

Dave Jericho

that is perfect, do you think that i will find people that will want to be in this play?

Tomorrow 7

well, it doesn't seem that there are too many parts...

i'm sure you can find enough to fill it out

ask around

people seem to love being in movies

Dave Jericho (2:47:08 AM):

awesome yeah, there are only about 7 main characters alright man,
thanks for the feedback,

please email me and tell me more about anything,
i look forward to working with you

Tomorrow 7

alright

Dave Jericho

as of right now, you can offiicially have the part of Avarice

Tomorrow 7

and... if you could write out an idea of what you have in mind for my scene, i would appreciate that, and then i could flesh it out

Dave Jericho

i gtg to bed awesome thanks for everthing sam have a good night

Tomorrow 7

hey, no problem

you too peace

End of Scene "Feedback"

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